I like the beginning of your story, at least there's a mystery that lures readers to keep reading, but now the two guys are out already and she shows strong favoritism towards Guan, so, it's pretty clear who she's going to pick. the story line becomes flat, unless you want to torture that to make it more complicated, otherwise this is like the end of the story. I don't see any climax so far, I guess you really need to keep some enticements so you can pull one out once a while, as for now, everything is just not interesting at all, although I do appreciate your writing style. I guess that's the only thing that keeps me looking at this article. sorry, i don't type english on purpose, i can't type traditional chinese because the JJ system blocks it. 作者回复： 呃，有点受打击，看来我的节奏太慢了点，我会注意的。下两章节奏加快作者回复： 还有我今天会改下节奏平缓的两章
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I like the beginning of your story, at least there's a mystery that lures readers to keep reading, but now the two guys are out already and she shows strong favoritism towards Guan, so, it's pretty clear who she's going to pick. the story line becomes flat, unless you want to torture that to make it more complicated, otherwise this is like the end of the story. I don't see any climax so far, I guess you really need to keep some enticements so you can pull one out once a while, as for now, everything is just not interesting at all, although I do appreciate your writing style. I guess that's the only thing that keeps me looking at this article. sorry, i don't type english on purpose, i can't type traditional chinese because the JJ system blocks it. 作者回复：
呃，有点受打击，看来我的节奏太慢了点，我会注意的。下两章节奏加快作者回复：
还有我今天会改下节奏平缓的两章